中考优秀英语作文赏析点评

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【习作要求】

请以GoodHealth为题写一篇文章。

【参考范文】

GoodHealth

Thedesirefoodhealthisuniversal.Especiallynowadays,thepossessionofgoodhealthisregardedbynearlyeveryoneasessentialtoahappylifeaswellasasuessfulone.Onlyingoodshapecanyouexpecttolivefortablyorworkeffectively.

Howtokeephealthy,then?First,enoughtimeshouldbesetasideforperseveringinexercisesinadditiontosleepandrest.Secondyoumustgiveupthehabitsthatdamageyourhealth,suchassmokinganddrinkingtoomuchalcohol.Finally,besuretohaveyourphysicalcheck-upregularly.

Asforme,Ihavealwaysbeentakingcaretohavepropersleepandrelaxation.InmysparetimeIlikerunning,swimming,andplayingtabletennis.So,Icankeepfitandhaveagoodlife.

【名师点评】

本文层次清楚，逻辑分明，第一段讲好身体的重要性，第二段讲保持身体健康的种种方法，第三段讲就“我”而言，“我”如何加强体育锻炼。本文语言地道，亮点颇多，如：First…second…Finally…三个词分述三种方法；Thedesirefor,…isuniversal,Especiallynowadays,thepossessionof,isregardedbynearlyeveryoneas…,Only…canweexpectto….Howto…then?Asforme,Ihavealwaysbeentakingcareto…so,Ican…等，这些短语的运用使得文章错落有致，多姿多彩。